BEC写作

　　小伙伴们一起来看看出国留学网英语栏目的小编为大家带来的“BEC写作范文及模版: 非正式邮件”吧~希望对大家有所帮助哦!

　　首先看一篇非正式邮件~

　　要求：You are on holiday in London. Write an email to your friend Sarah telling her how you are spending your time.

　　Sarah’s email address is sarahcar@vmail.com You should write between 320 and 350 words.

　　To: SarahCar@vmail.com

　　Subject: London [1]

　　Hi,

　　How are you?[2] I’m having a wonderful time here and wish that the holiday will go on forever. Guess where I am at the moment![2] Well[2], I’ve found an internet Café just round the corner from our hostel and I grabbed the opportunity to email you and tell you how I’ve been spending my time here in London.

　　I’ve[3] been ever so busy the few days I’ve been here trying to visit all the interesting places. On Monday I visited Madame Tussaud’s. This is a waxwork museum. There was such a long queue to enter. Luckily our leader had booked the tickets beforehand. It was so wonderful seeing all those wax figures of so many famous people!

　　I’ve also visited the Houses of Parliament and Westminster Abbey, two other famous landmarks in London. Tomorrow we’re going on the London Eye, also known as the Millennium Wheel. This is a giant wheel that was built to celebrate the millennium in the year 2000. There are so many other places to visit. But we don’t just visit museums and other interesting places...

　　小伙伴们一起来看看出国留学网英语栏目的小编为大家带来的“BEC写作解析：这封邮件有何不妥”吧~希望对大家有所帮助哦!

　　首先看一看这篇邮件请找出其中的问题，然后试着改一改呢~

　　From: A@rightway.com

　　Date: 25:7:1-16:06:29

　　To: B@rightway.com

　　Subject: REMINDER!!!

　　John

　　Appreciate if you would consider and bear in mind that I am no longer responsible for dealing with petty cash. Some of your staff keep bringing their vouchers to me, but this responsibility has been taken over by Martin in Accounts, he is the one who should be contacted henceforth for all petty cash matters.

　　Your cooperation is appreciated in making sure all your staffs know about this.

　　BRgs/Sally

　　下面，试着指出其中的问题~

　　Subject: REMINDER[a1] !!!

　　John

　　Appreciate [a2] if you would consider and bear in mind[a3] that I am no longer responsible[a4] for dealing withpetty[a5] cash. Some ofyour staff[a6] keep bringing their vouchers to me, but this responsibility has been taken over by Martin in Accounts, [a7] he is the one who should be contacted henceforth [a8] for all petty cash matters.

　　Your [a9] cooperation is appreciated in making sure all your staffs [a10] know about this.

　　BRgs[a11] /Sally

　　[a1]这里记得遵循SMART原则。

　　[a2]措辞唐突生硬，有种趾高气扬的嚣张气焰...这篇信函是ask for cooperation，所以语气更应诚恳和气。同时应该加上明确的主语。

　　[a3]虽然用的是would，但其实与“你必须记住!”无异。 [a4]这里也比较无礼。

　　[a5]猜测写信人有可能是升值或者换岗位了，所以不负责现金兑换的事宜。但是语气很高傲…蔑视了之前的这份工作。

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