美国是个非常美丽的国家，资本高度发达的世界第一强国，也是文化多元化的移民国家，美国的社会福利好，生活环境优，是世界上教育质量最高的国家之一。美国是世界上教育事业最发达的国家之一。美国教育体系早在其建国时就初具规模。今天出国留学网为大家带来了美国留学文书修改窍门。
好essay是改出来的
我一直坚信好essay是改出来的，而非写出来的，建议大家重视对essay的反复修改。AO 没有太多时间来看一篇文章，每天要被无数篇世界各地的文章轰击，文字阅读的愉悦感一定可以帮助你的内容更易于被接受。所谓文字的愉悦感，在现代社会其实就是清爽，要有一定的幽默感但又不能太作，要有一定的写作技巧又不能太滑。原则上，清爽风趣的文字就是简洁有张力的。
针对简洁有一个小窍门：就是减少使用adj形容词，改用v动词。西方文化对动词的热爱简直无与伦比。后期的修改需要注意的事项：
(1)内容核对是重中之重，查看是必须介绍而被你遗漏的地方;
(2)语言错误是关键，寻找英语过了专八的前辈，实在不行寻找一些便宜的网上机构协助核对审查一遍。也可以寻找英语专业的教师帮你查阅审核一遍。总之，要尽可能确保语言语法上不出现失误。
(3)以往的留学申请都是通过纸质媒介，国内早期的申请还会涉及到个人书法笔迹的问题，书法书写好的同学再材料审阅中会有相当大的优势。但目前多以email的方式发送申请材料，这样节约了材料成本和时间成本，方便大家被pass后能第一时间选择下家。无论是纸质材料还是电子版材料，保证材料的干净整洁、排版思路清晰，逻辑思维得体，不要出现杂乱无章的描述。
留学文书的整体思路就是：构思——写作——完善，每一个部分都是非常重要的，不要觉得TG成绩、GPA成绩牛得不行，教授推荐信都是好话，科研论文杠杠的，随便糊弄一下“留学文书”就一定能上HU或UC这样的世界级顶尖大学。那是绝对不可能的，除非他们的老师都瞎了。因此，花了那么多时间在GPA和GRE上，最后一步的留学文书也请多花一些精力和时间。
附上一名优秀申请者的留学文书原文，仅供学习和参考：
12年级学生Brittany Stinson在上周四得知她被五所常春藤大学-耶鲁、哥伦比亚、宾夕法尼亚、达特茅斯、康奈尔以及斯坦福大学录取。斯坦福大学去年的录取率是4.69%-比任何一所常春藤大学都低。Brittany Stinson在接受采访时说“我还在消化这个结果，我太兴奋了”。是什么让她被这几所名校青睐?Brittany Stinson自己的解释是：自己的文书。
下面是Brittany Stinson用来申请这些名校的Common App文书：
Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. Managing to break free from my mother’s grasp, I charged. With arms flailing and chubbylegs fluttering beneath me, I was the ferocious two year old rampaging through Costco on a Saturday morning. My mother’s eyes widened in horroras I jettisoned my churro; the cinnamon? sugar rocket gracefully sliced its way through the air while I continued my spree. I sprinted through the aisles,looking up in awe at the massive bulk products that towered over me.Overcome with wonder, I wanted to touch and taste, to stick my head intoindustrial?sized freezers, to explore every crevice. I was a conquistador, butrather than searching the land for El Dorado, I scoured aisles for free samples. Before inevitably being whisked away into a shopping cart, Iscaled a mountain of plush toys and surveyed the expanse that lay before me:the kingdom of Costco.Notorious forits oversized portions and dollar? fifty hot dog combo, Costco is the apex of consumerism. From the days spent being toted around in a shopping cartto when I was finally tall enough to reach lofty sample trays, Costco hasendured a steady presence throughout my life. As a veteran Costco shopper,I navigate the aisles of foodstuffs, thrusting the majority of my weight upon agenerously filled shopping cart whose enormity juxtaposes my small frame.Over time, I’ve developed a habit of observing fellow patrons tote theircarts piled with frozen burritos, cheese puffs, tubs of ice cream, and weight?loss supplements.Perusing the aisles gave me time to ponder. Who needs three pounds of sourcream? Was cultured yogurt any more well?mannered than its unculturedcounterpart? Costco gave birth to my unfettered curiosity. While enjoying an obligatory hot dog, I did not find myself thinking about the ‘allbeef’ goodness that Costco boasted. I instead considered finitudes andinfinitudes, unimagined uses for tubs of sour cream, the projectile motionof said tub when launched from an eighty foot shelf or maybe when pushed from aspeedy cart by a scrawny seventeen year old. I contemplated thephilosophical: If there exists a thirty?three ounce jar of Nutella, do wereally have free will? I experienced a harsh physics lesson while observing ashopper who had no evident familiarity of inertia's workings. With a cartfilled to overflowing, she made her way towards the sloped exit,continuing to push and push while steadily losing control until the cartescaped her and went crashing into a concrete column, 52” plasma screen TVand all. Purchasing the yuletide hickory smoked ham inevitably led to aconversation between my father and me about Andrew Jackson’s controversiality.There was no questioning Old Hickory’s dedication; he was steadfast in hisbeliefs and pursuits – ualities I am compelled to admire, yet his moralswere crooked. We both found the ham to be more likeable–and tender. I adopted my exploratory skills, fine tuned by Costco, towards my intellectual endeavors.Just as I sampled buffalo?chicken dip or chocolate truffles, I probed therealms of history, dance and biology, all in pursuit of the ideal cart–oneoverflowing with theoretical situations and notions both silly and serious.I sampled calculus, cross?country running, scientific research, all ofwhich are now household favorites. With cart in hand, I do what scares me;I absorb the warehouse that is the world. Whether it be through attemptingaerial yoga, learning how to chart blackbody radiation using astronomicalsoftware, or dancing in front of hundreds of people, I am compelled to tryany activity that interests me in the slightest. My intense desire to know, to explore beyond the bounds of rational thought; this is whatdefines me. Costco fuels my insatiability and cultivates curiosity withinme at a cellular level. Encoded to immerse myself in the unknown, I findit difficult to complacently accept the “what”; I want to hunt for the “whys”and dissectthe “hows”. In essence, I subsist on discovery.
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