2014考研英语作文万能模板

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　　What a thought-provoking picture!In the picture ,many people who are taking bowls are rapidly running to the death ,and everyone is urgently hoping to get some water ,but the death seems to be seriously weak because of lacking water(加逗号)too .Undoubtly(拼写错误，改为Undoubtedly) ,we all konw(拼写错误，改为know) the water is very important to humanity ,and the lack of water sources is becoming increasingly serious problem(去掉problem，该句话意思为“水资源的短缺变得越来越严重”) in zhe(拼写错误，改为the) moder(拼写错误，改为modern) society .Indeed ,on the earth ,there exist(改为exists) a lot of water ,including the river ,the sea and the water under the earth ,bue(拼写错误，改为but) there is a phenomenon of water shortage ,why ? On(改为For，注意for one thing为固定用法;不要将其与on one hand弄混淆) one thing ,we can not(改为don’t，仅表示否定，而can not表示“不能”)make use of all water on the earth ,such as the water in the sea .On(改为For) another ,with the developmeng(改为development) of society ,people need more and more water to promote the economy(为什么发展经济需要越来越多的水呢?有什么依据?注意写作中的论据一定要有说服力) ,and the pollution of water is becoming an increasingly serious problem .And above all ,people do not have an awareness of protecting water sources .In order to ease this problem ,various steps have to be adapted(改为adopted，注意区分adopt和adapt，前者为“采取”，后者为“适应”) and both the government and everyong(改为everyone) could not shirk their accountability .F...

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　　The drawing indicates a long banner with the word “volunteer” and a website about volunteering on it ,and lots of people is(改为are，主语为people，谓语动词用复数)portarying(拼写错误，改为portraying) the outline of their hands to show sportive(改为support，此处应表示的是人们对志愿者服务的支持，且show为动词，后面应接名词作宾语，而sportive为adj.，表示“运动的”).Simple as it is,the picture reveals an exciting phenomenon that more and more people are willing to be volunteers.As the society developments(改为develops，此处应该使用动词形式), our material comforts are considerably enhanced, thus, we are capable of the time and energy to help others. At the same time,with(去掉，若使用with，句子则无主语) the moral climate is getting better, which is under everybody’s efforts,(加and，两个句子之间应该用连词连接)the members of these volunteering organizations are mostly never asking for any rewards either on fame or money,so that the organizations can survive easily. It is hopeful that we will enjoy a more harmony(改为harmonious，more后面应该跟形容词，且后面的society为名词，应该用形容词修饰) society in the future,if the things developes like this.Therefore,when we are eager to show our kindness,it is really necessary to keep our mind clear. For one thing, one should never give up once he begins to be a volunteer.For another,volunteer work is also a (去掉a，responsibility为抽象名词，不能用不定冠词修饰，)responsiblity(拼写错误，改为responsibility) (建议改为volunteer work also needs responsibility), just as our normal work,so do tr...

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　　As is subtly portrayed in the drawing, the picture on the left illustrates a young boy wrote(改为writing或者with) a famous football player'(加s,即player’s) name,(去掉)——Beckham ,(去掉) on his face, (句子较复杂，可改为a young boy has the word “Beckham ”,the name of a famous football player, written on his face) and the other picture on the right illustrates a young man who wants to have a hair style of Beckham and spends on 300RMB(改为which needs 300RMB). These pictures illustrate(加 that)the worship of star(改为the stars，或把整体改为idol-worshipping) is popular in the modern society.There are some factors contribute(改为contributing) to this phenomenon. The first factor(加is) that the ideology of young individuals in modern society is not independence(改为independent, independence是名词) . They do not know that(去掉) what is worth to hold (改为what to hold)and what is(去掉) they really want or need. The second factor(加is) that the atmosphere of the modern society is not verybenefit(改为beneficial，benefit是动词) to the development of young folks. With the dissemination of TVs, magazines,(去掉) and so forth, the environment of worship of star(改为idol-worshipping) is increasing popularity(改为becoming increasingly popular). So it can influence young person(加s) always and everywhere.In my point of view, the preference of individual, there is no one right or wrong choice(句式混乱，改为there’s no...

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　　AS Is(注意大小写) shown above,a funny hen claimed that her eggs with(that后面应该跟的是从句，从句中应包含谓语动词，建议将with改为have) no edge and the like which is the most fundamntional(拼写错误，改为fundamental).(作者这句话是要表达什么内容?)Simple as the drawing is ,the symbolic meaning behind ti(改为it) is as deep as ocean(注意句末标点)The honest is not only necessary,but also indepensible(拼写错误，改为indispensable).As the old Chinese proverb says."Honest is gold."However,in no country other than China,it has been said that,the problum(拼写错误，改为problem) of opposite the pormise(拼写错误，改为promise) more serious(句子逻辑关系不明确，改为the opposite of the original promise is more serious) ,and people fail to attach attention to the "gold".Individuals and organizations can make money,take porfits(拼写错误，改为profits) and even obtain wealth by attend promise.To be honest can also have added (改为add) benefit of increasing one's knowledge,giving us a new perspective of outside world.According to a survey conducted by China Acadmy(拼写错误，改为Academy)of Science(CAS),honest can relieve not only pressure but also anxiety and such problums(拼写错误，改为problems)as depression,stress,isolation and solitude(注意句末标点)All in all,obtain(改为obtaining，一句话中只能有一个谓语动词)the promise plays a key role in our daily life.The unhonest(改为dishonest，表示“不诚实的”，没有unhonest一词), in view of the complexity of such issue,we must treat it socially,economically and cu...

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　　As is vividly unfolded in the caricature,A(改为a) little boy is required to finish reading a mass of books which are even higher than his height by his father(此处作者想用by his father表达什么含义?建议去掉),whose facial expression implies that he is rather unwilling and distressed.in(改为In) the picture,there is a book called Early-MBA.genarally,It is(注意标点及大小写的正确使用，建议作者改为“, which is generally”)read by adults.the(首字母大写) drawer aims to reveal a symbolic meaning that parents should cultivate children according to his(改为their) aptitude,instead of blind notion of education.In contemporary society,the number of students who suffer from cram school(改为schools) and the pressure of their parents(句子层次混乱，建议加“, which改为定语从句”)has increased at an alarming rate.Careful deliberation of this phenomenon has illustrated me on why this should be so(表达不准确，改为There are numerous reasons why exists this phenomenon, and I would explore only a few of the most important ones here).Fierce competition,in the first place,constitues(拼写错误，改为consists) one of the primary reasons.According to a recent survey made by sina,there are one million students choose to pursue a master degree after graduation.Attending cram school(改为schools) will lay a foundation for future development.Convergent thinking existing in the society is also the breeding ground for this trend.This undesirable genera...

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　　From the picture above we can see that there are three trees in the picture, and one of them is growing very strongly.(用一般现在时，且strongly运用不合适。可改为one of them grows very well) However, the other two trees (去掉)look like very small. If you take a(去掉) careful notice, you’ll find that a tree has become bend(bent) because of (去掉，因为后面是个句子)the big tree hostile his development. (the big tree holds back its growth)The drawer(drawer是抽屉的意思，painter) of the image aims at revealing a common phenomenon in our country, children today are generally spoiled. There are two major reasons for the problem. On one hand, as the reform of population policy, most families are allowed(加to have)only one child who is usually regarded as the ‘apple’ of parent’s(parents’) eye. Therefore, parents are always try (trying) their best to provide their child with everything they want. On the other hand, lacking the awareness of bearing hardships is also an important reason that can not be ignored.I think it is imperative that we should take some effective measures. To begin with, our government can modify the policy that allows families to raise more than one students(child). In addition, the most (加effective或者important之类的形容词) measure of all is that we should cultivate the sense of dependent. Only in this way, can we meliorate the problem in the near future.

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　　In the given picture, there are many parents standing the gate of (outside)the examination room. As we see, they are so worried that the sweat began (begin)to pour down their face. In china, it is common knowledge that the exam decides (may determine)the future of children. Hence, it reflects the problem that the (加上current Chinese表意更完整)educational system is unreasonable.In fact, the problem has existed for several years. Especially in china, the examination score decides the children’s development in the future.(语法正确，但句意不合理。改为the examination score may influence children’s future development.)In a sense, the examination seems to be the only standard that chooses the talents(can be used to select talents). Furthermore, it is so terrible educational system (the educational system is so terrible). I think we must take some effective measures to solve this problem.In my opinion, I think we should adopt the following measures. On the one hand, we should reform the educational institution and establish a more flexible approach to choose the talent (select talents). On the other hand, parents should give up the idea that the exam is the only key to judge (measure)children’s ability.

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　　本文立意正确，内容切题，结构完整,需注意以下问题：1、文章的立意虽然正确，且深入切题，但文章的内容不够丰富充实，原因分析不够深刻。第二段在分析造成现象的时候提出了三点“考试决定孩子的未来”“考试是选拔人才的唯一标准”“教育制度很差”——“考试为什么会决定孩子的...

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　　In the given picture, there are many parents standing the gate of (outside)the examination room. As we see, they are so worried that the sweat began (begin)to pour down their face. In china, it is common knowledge that the exam decides (may determine)the future of children. Hence, it reflects the problem that the (加上current Chinese表意更完整)educational system is unreasonable.In fact, the problem has existed for several years. Especially in china, the examination score decides the children’s development in the future.(语法正确，但句意不合理。改为the examination score may influence children’s future development.)In a sense, the examination seems to be the only standard that chooses the talents(can be used to select talents). Furthermore, it is so terrible educational system (the educational system is so terrible). I think we must take some effective measures to solve this problem.In my opinion, I think we should adopt the following measures. On the one hand, we should reform the educational institution and establish a more flexible approach to choose the talent (select talents). On the other hand, parents should give up the idea that the exam is the only key to judge (measure)children’s ability.

　　总体点评

　　本文立意正确，内容切题，结构完整,需注意以下问题：1、文章的立意虽然正确，且深入切题，但文章的内容不够丰富充实，原因分析不够深刻。第二段在分析造成现象的时候提出了三点“考试决定孩子的未来”“考试是选拔人才的唯一标准”“教育制度很差”——“考试为什么会决定孩子的...